Young gun

Strong idea there but,as I told you before, please start expanding and put some conviction into this. darko.demark666 did most of the explanation which i guess wrapped up your whole ...

Parts of your poem were like deja vu to me because it resembled something i wrote........only difference being........much better and very well expanded. I could totally understand how the narrator ...

Definitely by may seem inefficient and uneconomical.....but that's just the way the thought flow comes.You don't have waste your time starting your laptop/pc if a thought strikes you in the ...

Really the approach of a practical person shown in your poem.You really are pointing out to the fact that we should stand up against all the contradicting nonsense going on ...

Hey........amazing work there.You kept very simple and straightforward.I could quite understand the situation of the lonely boy and I guess every one at some point of time in their life ...

All That It Took ……And so they said to this little boy of eight, If he went on dreaming doom would be his fate. They mocked him, the boy was ...

Hi. That was a simple,touching and very effective poem.You really moved at the right pace for the reader.Great determination to stay positive on part of the narrator and its really ...

I understand that.If you experiment a little more with the idea, the poem will expand.Getting a clear idea is very important which in your case has happened very well, leading ...

Wow..........you pretty much covered every aspect possible in that essay on your own.Anyways.....I"ll put forward some of my own thoughts: Many times marriages can end in divorce due to the ...

Good idea............. but it seems that you have just put a random thought over here. You should put in more effort next time and expand on your poem. tell what ...

Great work there.Death is something I write about in some of my poems so i could really identify with this one. I liked the comparison of death to the unknown ...

Undecided but not unsure Tell me what you want to grow up and be? A quite tough question they once asked me. I asked some peers about their pick, But ...

I really didn't understand the title till I read the second stanza.If the girl is really intended to be depicted blind then the poem suddenly becomes very clear on a ...

I must say...nice poem.The beginning was good-straight down to business. The poem has clarity and is great because of its simplicity both,in words and presentation. If I got the poem ...

Thanks for your reviews people.This poem might not have come out well because it was my first attempt at non-rhyming poetry.And about that last line...i guess i added it unnecessarily.